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Forsaken

February 18, 2015
By RealRiter GOLD, Astoria, Oregon
RealRiter GOLD, Astoria, Oregon
10 articles 0 photos 65 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I did not fail 101 times, but I simply found 101 ways that did not work." -Thomas Edison


Why do you talk in such a peaceful, calm manner?
You seem so serine, like life doesn`t matter
But don`t you know that God`s love was shed, the representation of the red banner?
Why do thou not talk when I ask of this weirdness?
Very meanly, redness, purplish-ash, fur
All of these voices in side my head are a blur
I said I`d give you hand
You feel I`m weak as thou lo`ly sand
Frankensince, gold, and myrr
These were the gifts that were laid before my Savior
“Your Savior? Sure.”
Viking, Patriot, Indian, or Free
I tell you to look, don`t tell me you can`t see
But I`m telling you now
You are free as can be
Now though doeth not what a forsaken soul would say
Because there are not a single one left of those in our day


The author's comments:

This is a poem about Jesus` forgiveness. I love Him, and He obviously loves me as He died for my sisns and rose again.


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RealRiter GOLD said...
on Feb. 21 2015 at 3:47 pm
RealRiter GOLD, Astoria, Oregon
10 articles 0 photos 65 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I did not fail 101 times, but I simply found 101 ways that did not work." -Thomas Edison

Thank you. I looked at it, but I am not sure what to say about breakdancing. I would love to comment on a poem of yours, though. Please send me a link to any that you might have.

HammadWaseem said...
on Feb. 21 2015 at 3:38 pm
HammadWaseem, Lahore, Other
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Favorite Quote:
Be proud of who you are.
-Eminem

You can't see me
-John Cena

Ooh, somebody stop me!
-Mask

thats amazing @RealRiter BTW will you comment and rate on my work? TeenInk.com/video/dancing/114206/The-Unbeatable-Breakdancer

RealRiter GOLD said...
on Feb. 20 2015 at 3:24 pm
RealRiter GOLD, Astoria, Oregon
10 articles 0 photos 65 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I did not fail 101 times, but I simply found 101 ways that did not work." -Thomas Edison

Thank you so much! Please tell me if there is anything that I could change about it to make a better one next time.:)

GGauns said...
on Feb. 20 2015 at 8:36 am
GGauns, Ponda, Other
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Favorite Quote:
'We cannot choose to get hurt in this world. But, we do have some say in choosing what can hurt us.'

It's really nice..

RealRiter GOLD said...
on Feb. 19 2015 at 5:58 pm
RealRiter GOLD, Astoria, Oregon
10 articles 0 photos 65 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I did not fail 101 times, but I simply found 101 ways that did not work." -Thomas Edison

Please do comment on my poem. I would really like some advice of how I could do better next time.