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February 20, 2015
By RealRiter GOLD, Astoria, Oregon
RealRiter GOLD, Astoria, Oregon
10 articles 0 photos 65 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I did not fail 101 times, but I simply found 101 ways that did not work." -Thomas Edison


Bible, notebook, pen and vigorous mind
These are the things that really shine
A Savior of love
My Savior above
These are the things that I`m proud of
Not a spoiled nor ruined or not dare trashed heart
Is inside of me because God cleansed me
Oh these are the things of God`s beautiful art
Unstable, uneven
Jagged, pointed, sharp
Is the mind of Satan
The evil fallen angel
Though his words may seem as soothing as melodious harp
Exquisite Savior
Breathtaking God
Overwhelming Spirit
You are not a fraud
Oh, these are the things that get me desperate
Because I know that the little kids-
This faith, they do not inherit
So live it
Keep it your favorite


The author's comments:

I have been having a hard time asking God to help me with my everyday activities, but when I look around, He is our only hope. I need to stop treating Him like an "extra", and start understanding that I am blessed and free from sin. I should act like it.


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RealRiter GOLD said...
on Feb. 25 2015 at 1:04 am
RealRiter GOLD, Astoria, Oregon
10 articles 0 photos 65 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I did not fail 101 times, but I simply found 101 ways that did not work." -Thomas Edison

Thank you, but I am a developed writer, and this is one of my many complete rhythms. I love the rhyming and words I chose, but hey, like you said, everyone has their own opinions, right?

on Feb. 25 2015 at 12:46 am
Allen. PLATINUM, Palo Alto, California
32 articles 9 photos 525 comments

Favorite Quote:
[i]No matter how much people try to put you down or make you think other things about yourself, the only person you can trust about who you really are is you[/i] -Crusher-P

Personally, I don't really like this poem. It's not so much the subject as the style. I think you could improve in rhyming and word choice. You have a good start here, but it's just not that good yet. I do think you can be very good at writing, though.

RealRiter GOLD said...
on Feb. 24 2015 at 2:58 pm
RealRiter GOLD, Astoria, Oregon
10 articles 0 photos 65 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I did not fail 101 times, but I simply found 101 ways that did not work." -Thomas Edison

Anyone who reads my article, please rate it the number of stars you think it deserves, and please write a comment if you can. Any sort of feedback is greatly appreciated, no matter how much. Thank you!

RealRiter GOLD said...
on Feb. 23 2015 at 5:00 pm
RealRiter GOLD, Astoria, Oregon
10 articles 0 photos 65 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I did not fail 101 times, but I simply found 101 ways that did not work." -Thomas Edison

Thank you joebro! I haven`t talked to you in awhile. Okay, I will. I see it made the list, nice!:)

joebro SILVER said...
on Feb. 23 2015 at 11:41 am
joebro SILVER, Compton, California
9 articles 0 photos 27 comments

Favorite Quote:
Dreams are like a box of chocolates, if you hold on and think about them for to long it will all start to melt away.

check out my recently posted poem "MINDFUL THINKING"

joebro SILVER said...
on Feb. 23 2015 at 11:37 am
joebro SILVER, Compton, California
9 articles 0 photos 27 comments

Favorite Quote:
Dreams are like a box of chocolates, if you hold on and think about them for to long it will all start to melt away.

wow this is really amazing I totally understand where you're coming from