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maybe next time MAG

March 1, 2009
By hillary811 GOLD, Bozeman, Montana
hillary811 GOLD, Bozeman, Montana
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you’re as sweet as the sugar pan of rio
the words dripped from your mouth
like water from a leaky faucet
i’ve been meaning to fix it
but just haven’t had the time
or so they say.

the look in your eyes
like straight black coffee
no sugar, no cream, no nothing
almost makes me wince the first hot sip
trickling down my throat
still swollen from your kisses.

surviving off a staple diet
of lattes – extra foam
sleep crusted at the corners of my eyes
doesn’t let me forget last night.
not yet.
flannel shirts against my cheek,
tear-stained and puffy,
but when is it not.
sour gummy worms snake through my throat
as slippery as your glances in the hall
dripping with disdain.

you’re too good for me,
you once said to me over a coconut macaroon
and a grande chai,
too hot still.
you told me I didn’t deserve this
damn right I didn’t deserve it.
and here you are now, wondering why I left.
wondering why I turned away when you told me to go.
I didn’t think it was that hard of a concept
to follow words as simple as those.

sleep drifts in and out of the window
like coffee at two in the morning
trying to stay awake, desperate to sort out my thoughts before I can lay my head down
but it doesn’t seem to be working.

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bmmsmh said...
on Mar. 2 2010 at 8:40 am
I love this poem! :)

britt47 BRONZE said...
on Feb. 23 2010 at 7:46 am
britt47 BRONZE, Statesville, North Carolina
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Favorite Quote:
Some people go through life by merely existing, to live is rare in itself.

i love this poem i especially love the comparisons its a amazing so deep and compassionate.<3

on Feb. 19 2010 at 7:45 pm
Shapphire10293 BRONZE, Waldorf, Maryland
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Favorite Quote:
"Begin with the end in mind"

This is fantastic

on Feb. 8 2010 at 2:43 pm
beautifuldownfall, Kkk, Iowa
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awwww. that was sad...and yet empowering. i loved it!

JennaBeth said...
on Feb. 4 2010 at 6:42 pm
JennaBeth, Morrison, Oklahoma
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I really like this!

on Jan. 30 2010 at 3:25 pm
CountryGothic GOLD, Somersworth, New Hampshire
16 articles 2 photos 206 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Once something has been said, it cannot be said in other words." -Aristotle

I really like this. The descriptions are wonderful!

kenna2013 GOLD said...
on Jan. 30 2010 at 9:50 am
kenna2013 GOLD, Corinth, Kentucky
12 articles 0 photos 107 comments

Favorite Quote:
"love begins with a smile,grows with a kiss,and ends with a teardrop."

I love it! the way you described was amazing!

on Jan. 30 2010 at 9:44 am
FlyleafFreak DIAMOND, Loveland, Colorado
51 articles 0 photos 203 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I have faith in fools;self confidence my friends call it"~Edger Allan Poe
"In this world of infinite insanity, your friends are the best psychiatrists you will ever have."~Me

Wow, this is amazing! I really like your style and your descriptions really do paint a picture for me. Excellent job, never stop writing.

sarahhh BRONZE said...
on Dec. 22 2009 at 12:41 am
sarahhh BRONZE, Richmond, Virginia
4 articles 0 photos 4 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I luv Frankie." -Stephanie

this is so good. seriously. i think this is my favorite piece of writing, ever. i love it.

on Nov. 12 2009 at 7:18 pm
sasssgirrrl22 PLATINUM, Pearl River, New York
27 articles 0 photos 266 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Giving up is not a part of my vocabulary."
"Don't let the fear of striking out keep you from playing the game."
"Truth be told I miss ya, truth be told I'm lying."

this is amazing. I can completely relate due to how descriptive u are. I luv this poem, awesome job

on Nov. 12 2009 at 2:16 pm
bri_bo94 SILVER, Spokane, Washington
5 articles 0 photos 4 comments

Favorite Quote:
My personal quote....

Live, Laugh, Love

Live long
Laugh loud
Love forever!!!!

OMG!! This is such a good poem. It is so sad. I can honestly relate to it. Keep writing, maybe one day everyone will have read it.

on Nov. 9 2009 at 5:50 am
Dunkelheitstieg BRONZE, Baldwin, Florida
4 articles 0 photos 92 comments

Favorite Quote:
"The poet ranks far below the painter in the representation of visible things, and far below the musician in that of invisible things. Why does the eye see a thing more clearly in dreams than the imagination when awake?,"Leonardo da Vinci.

Hey, what an awesome pem.;)

on Sep. 20 2009 at 8:46 am
IsobelFree DIAMOND, Hamilton, Other
71 articles 20 photos 296 comments

Favorite Quote:
"As long as there is open road, the familiar has the most formidable competitor." - Anonymous

That is amazing, but really sad. You're an amazing writer. Keep on writing!

Brndi said...
on Sep. 14 2009 at 12:35 pm
great job and thanks for the comment!! keep writing!! <3 much love

on Aug. 7 2009 at 1:46 am
MeaganDear BRONZE, Middletown, Connecticut
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PoetGirly13 said...
on Jun. 22 2009 at 1:01 am
Good job!

on Jun. 20 2009 at 8:37 pm
shelby_kat DIAMOND, Warren, Ohio
72 articles 3 photos 43 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I can sum up everything I've learned about life in three words; it goes on." -Robert Frost

i loved it^^ keep writing pleaasseeeeee!!

on Jun. 20 2009 at 2:45 am
OoODerekOoO BRONZE, Kinde, Michigan
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This is absolutely amazing. I love the connections. very nice. Great piece of work. you have a future. :) And it's looking bright.

on Jun. 15 2009 at 9:04 pm
Raid2bcool GOLD, Visalia, California
16 articles 2 photos 16 comments

Favorite Quote:
"People may not be able to get to the top because of who they are.... but they ARE able to do what IS at the top."

wow. this is absolutely outstanding... i love it and hope u write lots more poems so i can read them. =D

on Jun. 11 2009 at 7:53 pm
LoveLikeWoe DIAMOND, LeSueur, MN, Minnesota
54 articles 2 photos 748 comments

Favorite Quote:
Whoever laughs first has the sickest mind.

i thought that this poem was outstanding. I read it on and i loved it. Unfortunately i couldnt comment it there but i can here! :) i love it very beautiful. You should write a book.