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You & Me

October 8, 2009
By bluemagnet22 PLATINUM, Dearborn Hts, Michigan
bluemagnet22 PLATINUM, Dearborn Hts, Michigan
24 articles 16 photos 644 comments

Favorite Quote:
You were born an origanal why die a copy?The secret to success is the consistency to pursue.To the world you may be one person,but to one person you may be the world.To receive the right answer,you must ask the right question.Don't worry be happy! :)


I saw you today,
But you're not as I remember.
Your eyes no longer sparkle,
You've changed since last September.

You were so full of life,
Yet now you are so cold.
Your personality has tarnished,
When you once had a heart of gold.

You fell out of my life,
Just like leaves in the fall.
We were so very close,
Now you're not here at all.

You saw me today,
I'm the same as you remember.
My eyes still sparkle,
I've not changed since last September.


The author's comments:
Isn't it so sad when you see an old friend and their whole personality and outlook on life has changed...and not for the good. Well that's what inspired me for this poem...I hope you enjoyed it

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on Dec. 12 2011 at 2:40 pm
Torri_123 BRONZE, Las Vegas, Nevada
1 article 0 photos 8 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Follow your dreams and you will achieve."

I can totally relate to this poem...it's a great poem

on Dec. 12 2011 at 2:27 pm
GoGoGryffindor BRONZE, Las Vegas, Nevada
1 article 0 photos 13 comments

Favorite Quote:
-After all this time?
-Always.

This is a wonderful poem. I really like the emotion in it. This is a very relatable poem. Good job!

RedDaisy said...
on Dec. 10 2011 at 9:13 pm
RedDaisy, Guayanilla, Other
0 articles 0 photos 19 comments

Favorite Quote:
"It's not just having the courage; you also need the strength. What's the point of having courage if you lose and can't get back up after the first fail?" -Me-

A very beautiful poem indeed~ Your writing style reminds me of my own in that I like to finish with the beggining. Very strong, very deep. May that person inspire you to create another poem -one where the good times of the past reappear and find a permanent place in the present-

~RedDaisy~


on Dec. 9 2011 at 5:54 pm
gazbeannie BRONZE, Mesa, Arizona
3 articles 0 photos 1 comment
Simple, yet says a lot! :)

Chass BRONZE said...
on Dec. 6 2011 at 12:11 pm
Chass BRONZE, McLeansboro, Illinois
1 article 1 photo 2 comments

Favorite Quote:
Life is a waste of time, time is a waste of life, so get wasted all the time.

WOW!!! That is soo true.. 

 


on Dec. 1 2011 at 6:44 pm
beautifulspirit PLATINUM, Alpharetta, Georgia
35 articles 0 photos 1398 comments

Favorite Quote:
The future belongs to those who believe in the beauty of their dreams.
--Eleanor Roosevelt

Absolutely beautiful!!

on Nov. 28 2011 at 10:13 pm
sunshine7223 SILVER, Holdenville, Oklahoma
9 articles 0 photos 124 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Afterall, a loose screw doesn't want to need, and a hammer doesn't want to be needed." -Me

"Those who observe with their eyes closed and mouths open, are usually not as wise as those who allow their minds to wander freely." -Me

SUPER GOOD!

on Nov. 25 2011 at 12:51 pm
SummerBlossom SILVER, Centralia, Washington
5 articles 0 photos 7 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Where ocean breezes storm the soul,
Where the love of strife grows quickly old,
Where the touch of God is beheld in power,
Where the spirit finds rest in its darkest hour."
The book "Rooms"

Wow... I really like this. Love the tie back to the beginning! Keep writing! :)

on Nov. 25 2011 at 5:22 am
tweetiebruce PLATINUM, Sydney, Other
24 articles 0 photos 29 comments

Favorite Quote:
Life is like music - You can make mistakes so you try again. But when the piece can't be helped you try again another time.

This is a very well done poem, it is truly beautiful :) Congrats on writing a brilliant poem. Please check out some of my work if you can, i would like some feedback! :D Keep up the writing

on Nov. 22 2011 at 2:53 pm
Sonja0609 SILVER, Zuni, New Mexico
7 articles 0 photos 3 comments

Favorite Quote:
"If you look deep enough you will see music: the heart of nature being everywhere music." -Thomas Carlyle

Amazin!

 


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on Nov. 22 2011 at 11:40 am
Melody777 GOLD, Tonasket, Washington
17 articles 0 photos 14 comments

Favorite Quote:
"It's not who you are underneath, but what you do that defines you."

This was great, you put so much feeling into a short amount of space. Impressive!

on Nov. 21 2011 at 3:10 pm
EscapeSanity SILVER, Sahuache, Colorado
7 articles 1 photo 13 comments

Favorite Quote:
Not all those who wander are lost
Is it better to be hurt by the raw truth, or comfortably deceived?

This is an amazing poem. Sonnets are my favorite. I love how this can relate to anyone and everyone and says so much in only a few lines. AMAZING <3

on Nov. 16 2011 at 7:24 am
Terraincognita BRONZE, North Richland Hills, Texas
4 articles 15 photos 35 comments

Favorite Quote:
Through our hold of reality we gain morality.

good poem! But it's not in sonnet form...

sonnets are written 10 sylables by 10 lines in this rime order:

a

b

a

b

c

d

c

d

e

e


kobie1kenobi said...
on Nov. 15 2011 at 9:19 am
I really did enjoy it, thank you. It relates to just about everyone, the main idea of it and all. It was extremely well-worded, the rhythm was all together, and the whole feel of it all captivates the reader. I guess you could say that it emanates good vibes. ;)

irishlass317 said...
on Nov. 13 2011 at 2:43 pm
irishlass317, Jefferson City, Missouri
0 articles 0 photos 134 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I asked Jesus 'How much do you love me?' He answered 'This much.' And He streched out His arms and died."

Very Good!!!! I love it!!!! :D

 


on Nov. 10 2011 at 4:37 pm
Jinxyness SILVER, St. Louis, Missouri
6 articles 0 photos 1 comment

Favorite Quote:
"Writers write."

I cannot put words to how accurately this represents how I have felt, and still feel. So I will leave it at an enthusiatic 'well done'.

~Jinx <3


BlackRose21 said...
on Nov. 10 2011 at 12:05 pm
BlackRose21, Warren, Michigan
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I totally agree. I have seen alot of this happening.

on Nov. 10 2011 at 11:32 am
Katherine_Parker BRONZE, Hillsborough, North Carolina
1 article 0 photos 3 comments
This is very good:)

on Nov. 10 2011 at 11:21 am
bakedbeans PLATINUM, Baltimore, Maryland
20 articles 0 photos 29 comments

Favorite Quote:
People often ask me "why are you so fast?" and my reply was "ask a basketball player why he or she keep making three point shots in a row or ask a football player why is he so good at breaking tackles. its practice!!! common sense idiot!!!" Charles.C

I kind of like this it's true and nice

on Nov. 8 2011 at 4:53 pm
writer101 BRONZE, Shippensburg, Pennsylvania
3 articles 0 photos 19 comments

Favorite Quote:
Slowly but shurly.

It is good and yes i agree with it is sad.Grat work!