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You & Me

October 8, 2009
By bluemagnet22 PLATINUM, Dearborn Hts, Michigan
bluemagnet22 PLATINUM, Dearborn Hts, Michigan
24 articles 16 photos 644 comments

Favorite Quote:
You were born an origanal why die a copy?The secret to success is the consistency to pursue.To the world you may be one person,but to one person you may be the world.To receive the right answer,you must ask the right question.Don't worry be happy! :)


I saw you today,
But you're not as I remember.
Your eyes no longer sparkle,
You've changed since last September.

You were so full of life,
Yet now you are so cold.
Your personality has tarnished,
When you once had a heart of gold.

You fell out of my life,
Just like leaves in the fall.
We were so very close,
Now you're not here at all.

You saw me today,
I'm the same as you remember.
My eyes still sparkle,
I've not changed since last September.


The author's comments:
Isn't it so sad when you see an old friend and their whole personality and outlook on life has changed...and not for the good. Well that's what inspired me for this poem...I hope you enjoyed it

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. said...
on Jan. 5 2011 at 11:25 am

This gave me such a good idea for a love letter to my gf sandy

 


Missa SILVER said...
on Dec. 31 2010 at 12:05 am
Missa SILVER, Alta Loma, California
6 articles 3 photos 6 comments
This was really good!!!! It reminded me of this friend i had but she went to another school and changed...when i saw her last week she seemed distant and more involved with her friends on the other end of the phonerather than the ones with her. i guess this sonnet of yours kind of put it all into words on a page. =D

J.C.Evans GOLD said...
on Dec. 30 2010 at 3:54 pm
J.C.Evans GOLD, Westland, Michigan
14 articles 50 photos 53 comments
Wow this is beautiful and sadly so true...continue writting...I would love to read more!

on Dec. 24 2010 at 8:18 pm
vtuperationem.laus, Killingworth, Connecticut
0 articles 0 photos 2 comments

Favorite Quote:
Literature as it is on paper is a shallow attempt of our minds to convey their great power. It is never finished.

this poem is lovely in the sense that it rhymes and has a good topic but it's not poetic. The reason i read poetry is to gain as much as possible from as few words as i can. This poem is just words, there is emotion attached to them but nothing deeper, noting that makes one need to read it over again. Go Deeper and you will do better; you have a knack for the rhyme part, not make your words speak more than they're worth.

on Dec. 24 2010 at 5:01 pm
Claire Gallo BRONZE, Safety Harbor, Florida
3 articles 0 photos 5 comments
also thanks for sharing! I too have watched a friend change and not really for the better.. it's sad but also a reality that we face.. people change. .we change and sometimes we don't even realize it...

mr poet said...
on Dec. 24 2010 at 1:18 pm
that  was great it reminded of one of my old friends, we were best friends. i saw him recently he wore all black and his colorful personality was dull, and gray..=( 

coolheart said...
on Dec. 19 2010 at 9:44 pm
coolheart, Aurora, Colorado
0 articles 0 photos 1 comment

Favorite Quote:
its not about the journey but about the destination

i love this peice thanks for sharing and it tottaly true its sad again thanks=)

on Dec. 12 2010 at 8:23 pm
KatieBug_SlayEm BRONZE, Linden, New Jersey
1 article 0 photos 2 comments
this poem is really good it made me think about me and my friends .

on Dec. 11 2010 at 4:34 pm
P@inLe55 PLATINUM, Poteet, Texas
23 articles 0 photos 38 comments

Favorite Quote:
Be your self and have fun, for you only live once

I realy like this it's good. its a wonderful peice of work keep it up.

on Dec. 11 2010 at 9:06 am
Bnubbs PLATINUM, Goshen, Kentucky
21 articles 6 photos 22 comments

Favorite Quote:
Let it be! All you need is love!

that is the same 4 me too. my best friend moved to texas in august and since ive seen her she isnt herself anymore and it makes me sad. we dont have the same conversations either, they are akward. you know what i mean?

on Dec. 11 2010 at 9:02 am
Bnubbs PLATINUM, Goshen, Kentucky
21 articles 6 photos 22 comments

Favorite Quote:
Let it be! All you need is love!

i have poems and pictures on now lol. and you really do have a talent here! i have re-read this poem so many times and ive sent it to my friends and they all LOVED it!

on Dec. 10 2010 at 1:10 pm
nikisrainebo BRONZE, Greensboro, North Carolina
3 articles 0 photos 2 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I do remember
The swing in your step
"The life of the party, you're showing off again
And I roll my eyes and then
You pull me in
I'm not much for dancing
But for you I did."

I thought this poem was beautiful and well-written. He had very good flow and rhythm. Also, I thought the image of "sparkling eyes" was excellent.

WallyGirl said...
on Dec. 8 2010 at 10:34 pm
WallyGirl, Colfax, California
0 articles 0 photos 2 comments

Favorite Quote:
"When life gives you a hundred reasons to cry, show life you have a thousand reasons to smile." <3

This is amazing.(:

on Dec. 8 2010 at 5:46 pm
adrienne131 BRONZE, North Wales, Pennsylvania
2 articles 0 photos 1 comment

Favorite Quote:
"A wonderful fact to reflect upon, that every human creature is constituted to be that profound secret and mystery to every other."
-Charles Dickens in A Tale of Two Cities

Wow! This is very well written and thought evoking.  I wonder if your friend realizes the way that he or she has changed.

. said...
on Dec. 8 2010 at 10:43 am
I like this. I usually have high standards for judging work but i like this.

on Dec. 7 2010 at 10:11 pm
bluemagnet22 PLATINUM, Dearborn Hts, Michigan
24 articles 16 photos 644 comments

Favorite Quote:
You were born an origanal why die a copy?The secret to success is the consistency to pursue.To the world you may be one person,but to one person you may be the world.To receive the right answer,you must ask the right question.Don't worry be happy! :)

Thank you:) I appreciate the comment

on Dec. 7 2010 at 10:09 pm
bluemagnet22 PLATINUM, Dearborn Hts, Michigan
24 articles 16 photos 644 comments

Favorite Quote:
You were born an origanal why die a copy?The secret to success is the consistency to pursue.To the world you may be one person,but to one person you may be the world.To receive the right answer,you must ask the right question.Don't worry be happy! :)

I'm glad you like it:)

I'm sorry, I hope everything works out for you


on Dec. 7 2010 at 10:08 pm
bluemagnet22 PLATINUM, Dearborn Hts, Michigan
24 articles 16 photos 644 comments

Favorite Quote:
You were born an origanal why die a copy?The secret to success is the consistency to pursue.To the world you may be one person,but to one person you may be the world.To receive the right answer,you must ask the right question.Don't worry be happy! :)

Me too, I think that really says something about someone's character...

on Dec. 7 2010 at 10:08 pm
bluemagnet22 PLATINUM, Dearborn Hts, Michigan
24 articles 16 photos 644 comments

Favorite Quote:
You were born an origanal why die a copy?The secret to success is the consistency to pursue.To the world you may be one person,but to one person you may be the world.To receive the right answer,you must ask the right question.Don't worry be happy! :)

You are so very welcome! And thank you for the compliment:)

on Dec. 7 2010 at 10:07 pm
bluemagnet22 PLATINUM, Dearborn Hts, Michigan
24 articles 16 photos 644 comments

Favorite Quote:
You were born an origanal why die a copy?The secret to success is the consistency to pursue.To the world you may be one person,but to one person you may be the world.To receive the right answer,you must ask the right question.Don't worry be happy! :)

Well, Thank You!